This is just a prelim content I am starting for my first e-book. Please read through and I appreciate genuine feedback. I would love it if it were in a few sentences rather than “very good”, “good”, “worst ra dei”, or “onnum velangala!” etc.,This is just a test content from my story and is not even grammar passed.
Queen Becca grabbed onto her 6-foot wand and planted it on the floor. The head of the stick glowed white as she commanded her castle, “His arrival is noted! Everyone departs at once. This is my ORDER!”
Everyone rushed outside through the…
She stayed still looking at me, never uttered a word or showed a reaction to my reply. And so was the inspector. I continued,
‘What? Are you surprised by the fact that we found out ourselves, or you lost the battle and gave up so that I spit every truth over here?’
I sat down in front of her as she smirked at me. “Continue!” she said, leaning back.
‘As you said, you were returning from work. You knew our investigation would lead to the I-T raid that was happening at the Hotel. So, this means you had gone to…
Inspector Ramasamy asked — “Okay, this could be just a theory. What if..” and a knock on the door.
Faiyaaz whispered, “This is the most filmic moment ever happened in my life. Are we sure the writer didn’t forget something? I mean, we were just speaking about the person.”
Jeff — “Shh! No more fourth wall breaks”
Pravin entered the room and smiled.
Ramasamy — “Mr. Pravin? What brings you here? Please come, sit down.”
Pravin went straight to point, “Sir! I am turning in.”
Jeff, “Wow! That was easy.”
Ramasamy looked at me and immediately said to Pravin, “Mr…
Jeff — “Sangeet! I do not understand anything right now. If the person in the investigation room is not Deephika, then who is? I mean who’s the real person? Like Mr. Ramasamy asked — Was the victim even named Kabini?”
My mind was pondering so much and I felt restless after a long, long time. My heart was pounding so hard and it almost felt like I was going to get a panic attack.
“Sangeet? Sangeet?” Jeff was shaking me by my shoulder. Their voices began to fade.
I closed my eyes as I opened my mind and stood in…
After coming out of the investigation room, I was talking with Jeff about the details as we recorded all the notes into his phone.
“SIR!” Faiyaaz was running towards us with his side bag with his iPad grasped in his hand.
“Sangeet?” Jeff looked at me while I signaled him to go into the office which was next to the Investigation room. We went inside as he was connecting the iPad to the inspector’s computer.
Inspector Ramasamy — “Please have a seat, detectives. You too, Faiyaaz!” and he looked at the other two policemen inside the room and said, “Folks…
Deephika had been working long hours in her office room and wanted to stay there until morning since it had been late hours.
A text arrived on her phone and it was from a private number.
Text: Hello D. Do you think Kabini is really safe?
Deephika replied: Who is this? And WTF.
(dot dot dot)
Text: Some surprises are left unsaid. And speaking of surprises, do you remember what’s today all about?
Deephika: It’s my anniversary day but I have work. Stop texting me.
Text: You’re going to miss a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity. …
Faiyaaz had been preparing the report in his Mac in the laboratory office while I had entered into his office and went straight to the shelf where his favorite Mango Bites candies are stored along with a few other snack items.
“Good Evening Sir! I am just finishing up with the report. There are a few matches here and there. This is seemingly sketchy.” He said while looking at the computer without lifting his head.
‘Faiyaaz!. Why haven’t you assigned these to your team and gone home already?’
Faiyaaz exhaled and finally looked up — “Now you’ve got my attention…
“Yo! Kabini? Is that you?”
Kabini shrugs and squints when she asks — “Pravin? Hey! How are you?”
Pravin steps near — “I’m good. So long eh? Are you alone? Wow! That’s very abnormal of you.”
Pravin — “Wait, I’ll order a drink for you.”
Kabini — “Hey! I barely finished this one. Also, this orange juice is fine for today. Nothing else. I gotta head home for a great dinner. So, I’m keeping my evening very light.”
Pravin — “Right! So, how’s your interior designing going on?”
Kabini — “Cut to the chase! I saw you follow me down…
Episode 1: The Barking Dog
“I had been parking my car inside the garage when I heard the noise upstairs. But I had to fully lock the shutter as it was raining like cats and dogs. And speaking of which, my dog began to bark as soon as the screaming was heard. That’s when I confirmed it was in my home. Then I rushed to the room to see her dead,” she whimpered and pulled out a tissue from nearby and wiped off her tears.
I asked her, ‘But you never saw the killer jump and run away from her…
Lindo — “Sir! Now, what? I mean the entire narrative is changed. Us and our police friends, everyone is in trouble. Co0urt’s gonna penalize us for not investigating enough.”
I was sitting in my easy chair outside my office under the shade of huge trees in front of my house. I covered my face with my hands and slowly slid it down and saw him — ‘Yes, they would! We have to bear the expenses. I know, but… All my plans are in shambles!’
Lindo — “Even if Aravindhan changes his mind or is getting arrested, he was with us…